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Dec 28, 2022Liked by Jordan Green

Eola is "yola", OK. How about Bajo? Bay-joe or Bah-ho???

Thanks for the start. Eager for more!

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Ah, I just saw this as I posted! I was wondering if the footnotes would work and that seems to be the general feedback so far.

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Dec 29, 2022Liked by Jordan Green

I only saw a footnote for Eola. Should there also have been one for Bajo? :-)

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Fixed.

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May 10, 2023Liked by Jordan Green

Reading back on this you could practically smell and taste that campfire dinner.

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Barry, you’re so kind. I’m so psyched to have a physical copy ready for you soon!

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What do you guys think of the footnotes? This could be a place to store definitions, but are they too distracting?

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I like the footnotes. Definitions would be good too. Like... for bolas for sure.

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They don’t bother me, but you could also have a glossary with pronunciations at the beginning, right after the map.

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Dec 30, 2022Liked by Jordan Green

Norah (11) and I are reading and are torn about this... at first we agreed a glossary would be preferable but then norah said a lot of readers would just skip past it. I wonder if on a page the footnotes will be less distracting.

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Originally, I was just thinking that I want readers to have to look up words, because I get excited finding new words!

But the distraction aspect is real, so the way I envision this on the page is there'd be a box on the side of the page with, say, a drawing of a group of boars, and the definition of sounder. For pronounciation, I'm liking the glossary idea most.

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I like this solution over footnotes.

btw Jody, how did you connect with the Green Room?

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Hi Graig! I met Jordan through a mutual friend and we’re part of the same faith community. I hope you and Laura are well! 💕

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Reading a chapter is part of my new morning routine!

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That's what I'm going for! That old Prince Valiant feel. But with better characters and plot and action and art.

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Mine too, Aaron!

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This is making me want to have a campfire feast! I love the Northwest vibe to it all.

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There's some new content in here! I love it. (I especially like the "bats hunting" part.) New conversations and character developments... the 148 cousins! Ha! Enjoying it so much. I got my 11 year old to read the prologue yesterday (he read it aloud to me, surprisingly) and then today he read this chapter.

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